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The graph below shows the average montly change in prices of 3 metals during 2014

The graph below shows the average montly change in prices of 3 metals during 2014
The line graph illustrates the average monthly percentage
change
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 in the prices of
Copper
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,
Nickel
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, and
Zinc
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 throughout the
year
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 2014.
Overall
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,
Nickel
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 and
Copper
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 experienced a downward trend in their prices,
while
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Zinc
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 showed an upward trend. Notably,
Nickel
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 exhibited the most significant volatility over the period. In the first half of the
year
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,
Nickel
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's price
change
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 dropped sharply from exactly 6% in January to 1% in March, before hitting its lowest point at precisely -3% in June.
Copper
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,
on the other hand
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, saw a more gradual decline, decreasing by approximately 1.5% from January to June.
Zinc
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 started at 1% in January, spiked to 3% in February, and
then
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 significantly fell to 1% in June. In the second half of the
year
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, despite some fluctuations,
Nickel
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's price
change
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 rose rapidly to 2% in November.
Zinc
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 experienced a similar upward trend, reaching 2% by December. Meanwhile,
Copper
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's price
change
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 increased moderately to 1% in July and remained stable for three months. It
then
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 dipped to around 0.5% in October before rebounding to approximately 1.5% by the end of the
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, nickel, zinc, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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