The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates beverage buying habits in five cities in Australia, which are
Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
and
Hobart
.
Overall
, residents who went to
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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for
coffee
or tea in
last
Correct article usage
the last
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4
weeks
takes
Correct subject-verb agreement
take
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the majority in five Australian cities, except for
Adelaide
, where people who bought instant
coffee
in
last
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the last
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4
weeks
takes
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take
show examples
highest
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the highest
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proportion.
Furthermore
, people who bought fresh
coffee
in
last
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the last
show examples
4
weeks
takes
Correct subject-verb agreement
take
show examples
little
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a small
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proportion
in
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of
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five Australian cities. The percentage of people who lived in
Melbourne
and
Hobart
who went to
cafe
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cafes
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for
coffee
or tea in
last
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the last
show examples
4
weeks
take
Verb problem
is
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around 64%, and
then
is
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there is
show examples
Sydney
,
Brisbane
and
Adelaide
, which is above 60%, around 55% and close to 50% respectively. For those who bought instant
coffee
in
last
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the last
show examples
4
weeks
in
Brisbane
and
Hobart
, their percentage is between 50% and 55%,
whereas
others
is
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are
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from 45% to 50%. The ranking is
Hobart
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
,
Melbourne
and
Sydney
. In terms of buying
frech
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fresh
coffee
, none of them
above
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are above
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45%,
while
Sydney
is close to and
Melbourne
just
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is just
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over 40%. Both the
residence
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residents
show examples
of
Brisbane
and
Adelaide
are slightly under 35%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart, coffee, weeks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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