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The below chart gives information the data of immigration, emigration and net migration in UK between 1999 and 2008.

The below chart gives information the data of immigration, emigration and net migration in UK between 1999 and 2008.
The bar chart and line graph present the information including immigration, emigration, and net results of international entrances between 1999 and 2008 in the UK.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the trends of both immigrants and emigrants were almost an upward trend throughout
a
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the
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 decade. The total of immigration was the highest in 2004 internationally. From 2004 to 2008, the net of
people
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traveling
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travelling
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were
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was
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a
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apply
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higher than
last
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 five
year
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years
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, with almost
above
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apply
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200 thousand, exception
in
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of
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 2008 with approximately 160 thousand
people
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, and the sum of immigrants and emigrants reached a peak at around 250 in 2004.
Comparison
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In comparison
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 with the
last
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 five years, there were
all
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apply
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just over 150 thousand who stayed in the United Kingdom. Within a decade, the immigration was a
slightly
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 increase from about 0.45
million
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people
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 to nearly 0.6
million
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.
People
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 taking out from the UK rose minimally from just above 0.3
million
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 to roughly 4.2
million
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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