Some individuals believe that in the modern days social
media
,
mass
culture
and
friends
are the
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a
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evolvement.
While
, the others
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that family has a considerable role in
children
's growth because
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can breed their
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first idea has more significant effects than families because young generation would sooner get in touch with social
media
and their
friends
than family.
On the one hand, many parents try to behave well and have good communication with their
children
in order to develop their
children
as they want. Parents believe that having dinner with their
children
or spending
with them may have positive impacts on them. It can have a temporary result in
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treatment but these kinds of actions are not
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and do not have deep influences.
For instance
, many Iranian parents try to have dinner with their
children
to develop their
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communication, but young people do not pay attention to them and they evolve their
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according to
the
mass
culture
.
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try to develop
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of
children
, their effort is
and society has the most impact on their development.
On the other hand
, social
media
, popular
culture
, and
friends
are thought to have deep impacts on
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's
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. The majority of youngsters spend their most of
time
with
friends
due to
they have more common in comparison with family.
In addition
, they would rather treat based on trends and
mass
culture
in order to show they are up to date.
Moreover
, not only do they follow
mass
culture
and spend
time
with their
friends
, but
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spend most of their
time
on social
media
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the same as influencers.
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in
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Instagram and TikTok
media
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that influencers advertise. In point of my view, young individuals develop themselves
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trends and they are impacted by their
friends
and
media
more than
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.
In conclusion,
however
, families try to impact
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their
children
and breed them based on traditions, their
are minor and these are not
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and
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,
furthermore
, youngsters would rather pay attention to the
mass
culture
,
media
and their
friends
because they find more common,
as a result
, they spend more
time
with them than their family