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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there is a trend to develop modern
houses
 in the colonies.Some folks argue that
construction
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 of
houses
 should follow the same pattern as of previous buildings in the
surrounding
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,
while
 others disagree with
this
 statement.In my opinion,
although
 making similar homes
offer
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offers
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 some advantages of maintaining uniformity
of
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in
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 general area, everyone should have the right to build his house as per his comfort and needs that will promote diversity in a community. On the one hand, there are some benefits of having a row of residential buildings with the same design.
Firstly
, it helps in preserving the symmetry of the local area, which gives the place a stunning look.
For instance
, our accommodation in Gujranwala Cantonment is a mirror image of our neighbouring homes which gives an eye-catching view when looked
from
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 above.
Moreover
,if all the
houses
 in a colony have the same design, less effort will be required
on
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 their maintenance.To illustrate ,in our village, every house has a different dimension,
because
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 of
which
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this
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, the municipal committee has to face many challenges in doing the repair
works
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work
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.
On the other hand
, many people opine that
construction
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 of a
dream-house
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 is a prerogative of every citizen.
This
 is useful in terms of maintaining diversity in the community,because every residence having the same structure may give a flat and monotonous look.
Furthermore
, some individuals might have their own requirements that need to be taken care of
while
 designing the maps.
For instance
, someone having
allergy
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 to plants would not like to have a garden in front of his villa.
Similary
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Similarly
, some might want to make a sunroom on the top floor to enjoy the pleasant weather. In conclusion, there are varied opinions regarding the style of newly-built
houses
.I believe that despite the merits of uniformity and the ease in providing maintenance facilities in
similar fashioned
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 apartments, the residents should be free to make homes
according to
 their likings and
dislikings
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 and for the sake of variety in
the
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society.
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