The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
this
map
is showing
Wrong verb form
shows
show examples
A
town
called Garlsdon.
the
Capitalize word
The
show examples
(S) sample is about a
supermarket
. the
supermarket
is planned for the
town
. the map shows two possible ways for the
suopermarket
Correct your spelling
supermarket
. as we can see
that
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
the
town
has two railways and
also
thre
Correct your spelling
three
Main roads, There
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
two Housing spots one is on top of the
town
the
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and the
show examples
other one is below the
town
Center, around the center there is
a
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an
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industry area, and around all that there is the countryside. we can see
thet
Correct your spelling
that
the population of the
town
is 65k, the top main road has
Hindon
Correct article usage
a Hindon
show examples
population
10k
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of 10k
show examples
, and
the
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on the
show examples
left down there is the Brandon with 15k
popualtion
Correct your spelling
population
and
in
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on
show examples
the right down of the
town
there is 29k Cransdon, we can see that the
frist
Correct your spelling
first
supermarket
will be in the top left next to the Hindon road, And the other
supermarket
is in the
center
Change the spelling
centre
show examples
of the
town
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, supermarket, k with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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