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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart provides information on the expenditures of families
at
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in
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 one of the countries over the period of 1968 to 2018. The categories included Food, housing, Fuel and power, Clothing and
footware
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footwear
, Household
goods
, Personal
goods
, Transport,
Leisure
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and Leisure
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.
Overall
, it is worth
to note
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noting
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 that
Food
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the Food
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 and
Leisure
 categories represented the highest expenditures.
However
, during 1968, Food showed
a
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an
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 upward trend until it
droped
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dropped
 in 2018,
while
in contrast
,
Leisure
 bar showed a significant decrease before, rising to
neaely
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nearly
 23% in 2018.
While
, Housing and Transport bars exhibited
upward
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an upward
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 trend in 2018 by approximately 19% for Housing and 13% for Transport, the other categories including Fuel and power, Clothing and
footware
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footwear
, and Personal
goods
 displayed a downward trend decreasing by relatively 3-5% in 2018.
However
, Household
goods
 showed remained stable throughout the years.
Overall
, the bar chart
indicate
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indicates
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 a significant shift in
familes'
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families'
 spending nowadays, with higher spending amount for
Leisure
 and Housing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, leisure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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