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The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The table compares
passenger
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vehicles
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, commercial
vehicles
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,
motorcycles
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, heavy
trucks
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 and
light
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trucks
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 in terms of the number of
vehicles
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 in use and the percentage of growth over the four-year period starting from 2010 to 2014.
Overall
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,
passenger
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vehicles
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was
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 by far the most widespread
vehicles
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 in use during the survey period
while
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 the opposite pattern was seen in the number of
light
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trucks
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 registered.
Motorcycles
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,
additionally
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, had the highest growth
percent
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 after 4 years. From the outset in 2010, the number of
passenger
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vehicles
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 accounted for 11.8
million
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, which was 9.5
million
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 and 11.6
million
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 higher than that of commercial
vehicles
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 and
motorcycles
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 respectively. After 4 years, in spite of the smaller numbers in registered
motorcycles
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, its percentage of change was still threefold higher than the figure for
passenger
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vehicles
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 meanwhile there were 2.7
million
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 commercial transportation used, which was 17.4% higher than its figure in 2010. Commencing from 2010, 106
thousand
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of
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light
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trucks
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 were used in Australia, compared to 384
thousand
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of
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heavy
trucks
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. 4 years later, both of them witnessed increases, with 416
thousand
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 heavy
trucks
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 and 131
thousand
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light
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trucks
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while
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 the former rose 8.3%, reaching the lowest figure
whereas
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 the latter was threefold higher by 23.5% change.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passenger, vehicles, motorcycles, trucks, light, million, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trends
  • registration
  • vehicles
  • comparison
  • categories
  • growth
  • decline
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • surge
  • consistent
  • pattern
  • speculate
  • factors
  • economic conditions
  • consumer preferences
  • advancements
  • technology
  • implications
  • infrastructure
  • environment
  • societal behaviors
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