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Bar chart the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in 2017.

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The provided bar chart illustrates the
number
 (tonnes) of
tea
 and
coffe
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coffee
 imported by four nations namely Canada,
The
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Britain, The
Usa
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US
, and
Germany
 in 2017.
Overall
, it is clearly observed that the
number
 of
tea
 in the UK was the biggest among nations.
In addition
,
Germany
 had the largest
number
 of
coffee
.
To begin
 with, the UK and the
Usa
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US
 had the
number
 of
tea
 compared to the
number
 of
coffee
. As data shows the UK
tea
’s
number
 had a
fourthfold
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fourth fold
fourfold
 from
coffe
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coffee
 which was 20000 tonnes.
Subsequently
, the USA
tea
’s
number
 had a doublefold from
coffee
 which was 40000 tonnes.
Next,
according to
 the data on the
number
 of
coffee
,
the
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Canada and
the
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Germany
 had the total bigger
tea
 rather than the total of
coffee
 during the same time frame.
For example
, the
canada
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Canada
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coffe’s
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coffee’s
 total had a
doublefold
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double fold
double-fold
 from the
number
 of
tea
 which was 20000 tones.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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Germany
 had a deviation trend in
coffe
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coffee
 and
tea
 which was 40100 and 20000 tones respectively.
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grammar
Make sure to proofread for grammatical errors and inconsistencies in the use of articles ('the UK', 'the US', 'the UK'). Consistent and accurate use will help with clarity.
vocabulary
Use varied vocabulary to avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeatedly saying 'number of tea' or 'number of coffee,' you can say 'amount of tea' or 'quantity of coffee.'
task achievement
Provide a more detailed and insightful comparison between the countries to enrich your Task Achievement. Instead of repeating similar structures, try to highlight unique aspects or interesting observations in the data.
introduction
Your introduction is clear and sets the stage for the data discussion, which is great for the reader's understanding.
data analysis
You have correctly identified and compared key figures and trends from the bar chart, covering all countries mentioned.

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