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The chart and table below show the average number of children born to one woman and the average age of women when they had their first child in two countries between 1920 and 2019

The chart and table below show the average number of children born to one woman and the average age of women when they had their first child in two countries between 1920 and 2019
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The line graph illustrates a comparison between the United Kingdom and
Kazakhstan
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 and the
number
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 of
children
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 born to
women
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 in these countries between the years 1920 and 2019. The table indicates the average age of
women
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 from both countries when they gave birth to their first child.
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, it can be seen that Kazakhstani
women
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 maintained a higher
number
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 of
children
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 born in the country than
the
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in the
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 United Kingdom during the aforementioned period.
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, the trend of younger
women
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 giving birth in
Kazakhstan
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 compared to
the
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British
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women
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 continued. In 1920, the average
number
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 of
children
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 born to a
Kazakh
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woman
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 in comparison to a
British
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woman
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 was about 3.5 and 2 respectively. The
number
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 rose in 1960 to 4.5
children
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 born to
women
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 from
Kazakhstan
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,
while
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 slightly increasing to 2.5 in the case of
British
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women
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. These figures significantly dropped for
Kazakh
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women
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 from 4.5 to 2.5 and later increased only by 0.5 (that was, 3) in almost two decades.
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 with a slight dip 1.5
children
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 per
British
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woman
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 was seen in 2019. As per the table, in 1920, the average age of the
Kazakh
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woman
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 to have her first child was 23.5,
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 it was 3 years above for the
British
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women
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.
This
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 difference was reduced in 1980 between the UK and
Kazakhstan
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 with ages 26.5 and 26 respectively. It was evident that by the year 2019, the age of a
Kazakh
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woman
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 giving birth deferred to almost 4 years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 76%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kazakhstan, number, children, women, british, kazakh, woman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fertility rate
  • average age of childbirth
  • demographic changes
  • trend analysis
  • birth rate
  • cultural factors
  • economic influences
  • social dynamics
  • societal implications
  • population growth
  • comparative analysis
  • historical data
  • child rearing
  • family planning
  • maternal age
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