The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram represents the amount of population in four different Asian countries who living in cities in the period of time from 1970 until 2020, with a prediction for the next twenty
years
. In general, what stands out from the graph is that all trends have dramatically increased,
however
, in some
years
, the
Philippines
has fluctuated. The population of the
Philippines
started from over 30 per
cent
which was at the top of the list in 1970.
Next,
it increased gradually over the next 50
years
,
however
, it fluctuated from 1980 to 2010
which
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in
this
year the percentage of the
Philippines
and
Indonesia
are the same,
then
it will go upward
at
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around
a
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53 per
cent
which will not quite as busy as
Indonesia
.
Next,
Indonesia
started from the bottom of the list in 1970 at just over a tenth,
then
went up significantly from 1970 until 2020, and in 2000 it reached Malaysia at around 27 per
cent
and passed the
Philippines
in 2010. From 2020 to 2040 the number of people in
Indonesia
will increase dramatically and in 2040 is set to be over half which will not be anywhere near as overpopulated as Malaysia.
In addition
, the amount of people who lived in Thailand in 1970 was under one-fifth
then
went up gradually to 2020, and
then
it is set to be over 45 per
cent
which will be the fourth place in 2040. As regards Malaysia which in the early 70th decade was not quite as overpopulated as the
Philippines
, but over the next
years
it shot up and at the start of 2020 was about 75 per
cent
,
then
it is predicted that it will be over 80 per
cent
in 2040.
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