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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not real needs of the society in which they are sold. to what extent do you agree or disagree relevant examples from your own knowledge or experienece.

#sales #consumer #goods #power #society #experienece
Nowadays, the population is being influenced, by massive reach of advertising through social media, and television or just walking around. Some people think
that
is
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creating
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need
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the need
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 to
consuming
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products
,
on the other hand
, others believe that these
products
 make life easier,
therefore
, there is a real reason to be sold. from my
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 it seems that marketing influencers in a great significant what to make
desicions
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decisions
 on the market. There are several
products
 that generally are required in homes, which help with everyday activities. it is fair to say that in these cases advertising precisely is not considered a determinant factor. I must say that many popular
products
 have developed a high technology system which leads to people valuing them of huge importance to perform diary activities, saving more time and more effort.
On the other hand
, easy access to the announcements and all networks allows distinct kinds of communications to be manipulated by the companies who receive every one of the
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This
 marketing
influence
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such
 as actors, singers, and
YoUTubers
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YouTubers
 which promote various brands and show the needs of each item.
For instance
, like Tik - Tok apps are huge
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platforms
where
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 demonstrate attributes of
the
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things
,
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 and achieve persuasion buying from
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the consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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.
To sum up
, I the hold view that advertising encourages in
the
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society because
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 of media is used. To address customers to have their own strong
oppinions
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opinions
 and select any
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 in the shop.
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