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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

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People
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’s opinions differ as to whether studying a new
language
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 is the main purpose of individuals who want to visit or settle down in other countries or
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whether these
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 targets are not the only aims
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 make someone learn
foreign
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language
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 essay attempts to shed light on both perspectives before concluding that I am in
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 of the latter. On the one hand, some citizens argue that gaining an understanding of a new
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 just to meet the need
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 travel or work in foreign nations could be advantageous to a certain extent. The only reason to explain
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 problem is that
people
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 nowadays do not need to learn a new
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 by heart to communicate with foreign
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, they can use
technologies
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technology
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. There are so many apps or devices that help individuals to talk with each other in two different languages,
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 as Google Translate or Apple Glass, which is designed by Apple and can support citizens in communicating. With these products, it is easier for
people
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 to message or talk to everyone in the world.
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,
according to
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 a statistic in the United States of America, on a yearly
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basis,
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 there are 50
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of
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people
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 who tend to emigrate to
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 country in order to learn and work. So that citizens who are keen on working and studying in their nation,
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can give up mastering a new
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On the other hand
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, there are a host of compelling reasons as to why I am convinced that
people
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 should acquire a knowledge of foreign languages. One reason is that when we learn a new
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, it is not just about studying but it is
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 about learning
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 cultures. We can gain new skills
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 we are studying other languages,
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and we
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 can gain more knowledge about other’s traditions.
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 is a very suitable occasion that helps us to know more about the world.
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, some tour guides when they lead a group of visitors,
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can show
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these
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 the difference between their cultures and visitors’ cultures,
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that
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it
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 can create an attraction and ease of understanding for
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travellers
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. Another reason is that it is much faster when we communicate with foreigners in a natural way.
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 of using Google Translate and waiting for its response, we can talk to other nations’
people
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 if we have enough vocabulary about their
language
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. So it is much easier for business
people
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 who want to sell something to others. In conclusion,
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 it is irrefutable that learning a foreign
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 is only in order to work and study in other countries, I would contend that
this
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 argument is not true.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that the main idea of each is developed fully. This will help improve the overall logical structure of your essay.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and support for your arguments to enhance the depth of your task achievement.
task achievement
Make sure your conclusion restates the main points you have discussed in a more comprehensive manner.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction sets up the debate clearly, and your conclusion states your position.
task achievement
You have used relevant examples to support your points, which helps to reinforce your arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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