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The graph below shows the population of a particular country by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.

The graph below shows the population of a particular country by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.
#population #country #age #group #forecast
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the graph depicts
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population
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the population
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 of
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a specifict
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specifict
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specific
nation
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nations
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 with
age
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 categories in 1960 and
including
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prediction
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predictions
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to
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for
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 2040.
overall
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, people who have 15-64
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age
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are
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 at
peak
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the peak
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 of
populatin
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population
 in all time but predicted these
group
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groups
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 in
same
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the same
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 proportion with over 65
age
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 in 2040 meanwhile 0-14 around 10%
population
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 in 2040 it is
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a lowset
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lowset
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lowest
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 mount.
intially
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,
in
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from
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 1960
untill
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until
 1990, 15-64 was
on
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at
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 the top rate and
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 0-14
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on
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at
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 the second proportion
then
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 65+ had
lowest
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the lowest
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population
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In
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 1990 till 2040 we see
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 rise in
65+
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the 65+
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categorie
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category
, meanwhile
0
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a 0
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dramaticlly
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dramatically
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during
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time
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the time
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. the
grap
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graph
also
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predict
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predicts
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 that in 2040 two
group
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groups
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age
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meam
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the
 65+ and 15-64 group stay in
same
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a same
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number of
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population
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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