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in some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. what are advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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Some
people
 around the world prefer to rent their homes rather than having
an
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ownership of them. Renting a
stay to live
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 could bring benefits and problems. I believe that
flexibility
 is the main benefit of renting,
whereas
 the accumulation price is the main problem of renting. First of all,
people
 usually have an urgency to have a place to stay. That urgency sometimes leads
people
 to rent an apartment or a
house
.
House
 rentals are
also
 available in a plethora of selections, usually having their own add-ons of facility.
This
 makes
people
 interested in renting a
house
 as most rentals usually advertise their
property
 as having good deals.
This
flexibility
 of price ranges makes rental houses affordable for all families with various economic conditions.
On the other hand
, renting, if
people
 do it
on
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 a long term, can be a problem. The accumulation of renting for three or four years equals the amount of buying a
house
. Renting prices
also
 tend to rise
overtime
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, so the accumulation can be decreased.
Also
, renting doesn’t bring ownership of a
property
 to its buyer, its sole purpose is only
served
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 as a place to live. If
people
 have
the
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ownership of a
property
,
people
 have the
flexibility
 to decorate or renovate the
property
.
Not to mention
 to rent the
house
 itself to bring more profit. To summarise
this
 essay, there are some advantages and disadvantages of renting a
property
 to live in. The benefits are
flexibility
,
whereas
 the problems are more for long-term staying.
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The essay covers both the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home, providing a balanced perspective.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial commitment
  • down payment
  • initial costs
  • allocate resources
  • maintenance costs
  • mobility
  • relocate
  • market fluctuations
  • property value
  • building equity
  • appreciate in value
  • asset
  • personalization
  • restrictions
  • rental increases
  • lease renewal
  • financial instability
  • housing budgets
  • long-term security
  • landlord
  • lease agreement
  • equity
  • substantial
  • property ownership
  • property market
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