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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The given pie and table graphs illustrate data about
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the percenage
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percenage
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percentage
 of international
tourists
 from four different
nationality
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nationalities
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 and more details about their preferences in
tree
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three
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 different subjects in Australia.
Overall
, it can be easily seen that the majority of
tourists
 are from
the
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apply
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Asia and Europe
by
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37% and 35% respectively.
This
followed
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is followed
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 by the USA and other regions which
is
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are
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 18% and 10%
namely
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respectively
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. It is observed that the table chart provides data about
total
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the total
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lenght
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length
 of stay, most popular accommodation and main activity.
It is clear that
the
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European
tourists
 stay two days longer(16 days) than American
tourists
(14 days). The Asian
Tourists
 are the lowest for total staying even
they
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if they
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 prefer to
accommodate
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be accommodated
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 in 5-star
hotel
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hotels
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.
Moreover
,
the
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apply
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European
tourists
 and
tourists
 from
toher
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other
 regions chose to stay
caravan
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in caravan
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 or camping.
However
, the fundamental activity of Asian and American
tourists
are
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is
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 exactly the same which is sightseeing but it is different for others.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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