You recently recived a letter from a friends asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Writing a letter to this friend. Hn your letter . say why he/sshe would not enjoy going to college . explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her . suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Alex Thank you for sending me a letter about your future decision. As one of your

friend

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, I am glad to give you some

advices

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with

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expriences

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experiences

experience

. We have been a best friend

over

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fifteen years

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I know you better than others.

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my opinion, going to

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college is not a wise choice

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our age

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we have left school life

decades

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, even in

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favorite

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subject. Staying in class with concentration is not

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easy thing after we multitasked on work.

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college,

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ideas of

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job

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that

suits

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your character. Your kindness always

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you have

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passions

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helping people

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your organization is better than others.

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your

passions

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helping

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people even try harder to be a manager will be a better choice for you. Hope you find your

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place. Best regards David

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coherence cohesion

Try to break down your ideas into separate paragraphs for better clarity. For example, you could have one paragraph explaining why your friend would not enjoy college, another explaining why a job would be beneficial, and a final paragraph suggesting suitable job types.

task achievement

Aim to use complex sentences and a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing. For example, instead of saying 'getting a job is easier,' you could say 'pursuing employment might present fewer challenges than returning to an academic setting.'

task achievement

You provided relevant reasons and bases for your arguments, which makes your letter convincing and trustworthy.

suitable writing tone

The tone of your letter is appropriately friendly and supportive, which is very suitable given that you are writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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