These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

some people claim that Internet-based courses
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popular among people and some students prefer to choose
this
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since they
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force
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to go to university and give
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. they think it is not important that they study their courses in the
class
at university.
it is clear that
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Internet-based is very useful because of some special situations
such
as covid epidemy.
on the other hand
, in
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with
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a computer
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computer
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the students
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not eye contact with their teacher
andin
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and in
and
terms of
mentaly
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mental
, it helps to reduce stress
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them
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.
furthuremore
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Furthermore
, they can
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and eat if their energy
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down
whereas
, they don't
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eat in
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class
.
Also
, they can record the
class
on the screen
recorf
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recorder
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to that whenever
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they want. on the other side , some people have physical problems and they
me be
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don't have their own vehicle .
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, it is hard for them
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they go to university on a daily basis. certainly ,
go
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to
the
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class
has
direct
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effect on student's communication
due to
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with others ,
as well as
their responsibility
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be on time.
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,
the
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they
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can not cheat in
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.
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, the
feedbacks
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from their learning
are
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real and the teachers can evaluate them better. I think the students must go to
univesity
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university
and participate in the
class
.I look up to the attitude
due to
their cooperation in
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class
and
do
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team
work
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for
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get better.
on
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the ground
that
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work
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toghether
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together
leads to improvement and in my opinion , it can
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effect
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their social lives. In conclusion , both
of
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views have some advantages and some
disadvantage
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.
Thurefore
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Therefore
, everyone should choose a kind of study
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condition.
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