The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.
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The following diagram represents the amount of monetary
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given to developing nations from five
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anonymous
organizations
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from 2008 to 2011, indicated in a unit of
billion
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dollars
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.
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, it can be clearly observed that
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2 donated the highest,
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that of the
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the
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fewest.
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, it is
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to note that the trends of providing funds to those aforementioned countries
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in various: increasing, decreasing, and fluctuating, throughout the given time frame.
To begin
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with, in 2008 and 2009,
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3 offered the greatest amount of money among the other
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at around 1.5
billion
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dollars
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, followed by the second and fifth
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, at 1.4 and 1.3
billion
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dollars
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, respectively.
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, in 2009, the funding distributed from the first
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larger than the fourth one in 2008 about 0.1
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dolars
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dollars
. In regards
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,
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2010, the trends
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shifting in which the second
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outnumbered the former top spender from the previous years at just below 2.5
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dollars
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. Followed by the third and first
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at 1.4 and 0.7
billion
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dollars
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, respectively, whilst that of the other two had the same figure at 0.5
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dollars
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.
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in 2011,
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figure can be seen except the lowest rank is the fourth
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at less
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0.5
billion
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dollars
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words organizations, billion, dollars, organization with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • international aid
  • developing countries
  • economic assistance
  • fluctuations
  • trend analysis
  • philanthropic organizations
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • foreign aid
  • donor countries
  • recipient nations
  • financial contributions
  • economic conditions
  • fiscal policies
  • sustainable development
  • humanitarian aid
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
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