The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world
The pie charts compare
San
Diego
, California
and Worldwide in terms of how much water
was consumed/ used for residential, industrial, agricultural
purposes.
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and agricultural
Overall
, the rate of water
consumption for Agriculture in
Worldwide was by far the highest in all sectors Change preposition
apply
while
residential accounts for the majority of using water
in San
Diego
. San
Diego
and worldwide, additionally
, were similar in using water
in San
Diego
and Worldwide for industrial purposes.
As can be seen from the charts, the percentage of water
consumption for agriculture held the lion’s share in
Worldwide, accounting for 69%, followed by Change preposition
apply
California
and San
Diego
, with 28% and 17% respectively. There was a similar percentage in the proportion of water
used for Industry in San
Diego
and Worldwide, taking up 23%, which was 10% lower than the figure for California
.
On the other hand
, 60% of the amount of water
used for Residential COMES from San
Diego
, hitting the highest point in the purpose, compared with 39% in California
WHILE
the lowest number belonged to using water
for Residential worldwide, making up 8%.Submitted by [email protected] on
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