The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world

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The pie charts compare

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California

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and Worldwide in terms of how much

water

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was consumed/ used for residential, industrial,

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and agricultural

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purposes.

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, the rate of

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consumption for Agriculture

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Worldwide was by far the highest in all sectors

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residential accounts for the majority of using

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and worldwide,

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, were similar in using

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and Worldwide for industrial purposes. As can be seen from the charts, the percentage of

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consumption for agriculture held the lion’s share

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Worldwide, accounting for 69%, followed by

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and

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, with 28% and 17% respectively. There was a similar percentage in the proportion of

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used for Industry in

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and Worldwide, taking up 23%, which was 10% lower than the figure for

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, 60% of the amount of

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used for Residential COMES from

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, hitting the highest point in the purpose, compared with 39% in

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WHILE

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the lowest number belonged to using

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for Residential worldwide, making up 8%.

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Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Some people think that wearing uniforms fosters solidarity between staff and makes them feel part of a team. Others claim that it is better to have a dress code than a uniform. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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