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The chart below shows the number of travelers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000

The chart below shows the number of travelers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000
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The bar chart illustrates how many visitors used three airports, namely
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J.F. Kennedy
F
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Kennedy
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,
LaGuardia
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 and
Newark
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 in New York City over a 5-year period starting from 1995 to 2000.
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,
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 the number of
tourist
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 in
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J.F. Kennedy
F
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Kennedy
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 and
LaGuardia
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 registered a significant upward trend, that of
Newark
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 witnessed a stable trend during the surveyed period.
LaGuardia
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,
additionally
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, was by far the most widespread visitors in its airport
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. In 1995, the percentage of
travelers
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 selecting
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J.F. Kennedy
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Kennedy
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 airport accounted for about 24%, which was 12% higher than that of
Newark
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. After that,
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 there was a double increase to 48% in the figure for passengers choosing
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J.F. Kennedy
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Kennedy
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 airport in 1997 before plummeting to 42% in 2000, a plateau to over 40% was witnessed in the data of
Newark
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 from 1998 to 2000.
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, approximately 35% of the rate of tourists choosing
LaGuardia
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 in 1995. 5 years later, there was
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dramatic growth and reached its
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 of 68% in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words j, f, kennedy, laguardia, newark with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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