The chart show how bees make honey. Condense the information by choosing and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart show how bees make honey. Condense the information by choosing and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart show how bees make honey. Condense the information by choosing and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
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, when the
honey
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in the
hive
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has run out, the
bees
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will go collect the sweet in the nectar.
Then
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, they will bring the sweet to the
hive
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and refill it in the cells of the nectar. The
bees
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will make the sweet dry by using their wings to produce
air
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and make the
water
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evaporate into
honey
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.
First,
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the
bees
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run out of the
honey
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in their
hive
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.
Second,
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the
bees
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fly to the flower to get the sweet.
Third,
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they collect the sweet in the nectar of the flower, and they carry the sweet back to their
hive
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.
Then
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, they refill the sweet into the cells of the
hive
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.
Next,
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they produce the
air
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to the sweet to make it dry in the
hive
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. All of the
bees
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stick to the
hive
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and produce the
air
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by using their wings.
Then
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, the
water
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of the sweet evaporates into the
air
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.
Lastly
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, after the
water
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of the sweet evaporates, the
water
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will turn into
honey
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, hive, bees, air, water with synonyms.
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