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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the number of
people
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 living in four different countries in Asia ( Philippines,
Malaysia
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, Thailand, and
Indonesia
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) between 1970 and 2020, and the predictions for the years 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the Philippines and
Malaysia
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 had the highest percentages at the beginning of the
period
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,
while
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 Thailand and
Indonesia
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 had the lowest. It is expected that the populations of the four countries to
increase
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. The
people
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 of
Malaysia
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 accounted for 30% in 1970
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 and started to
increase
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 during the
period
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 with a slight decline in 1990 to around 45%, it is forecast that the number of
people
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 to be above 80% in 2040. The Philippines, had almost the same population rate as
Malaysia
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 in 1970 around 30%, after that, it showed fluctuation in 1990 around 48%, and dropped to 40% in 2010.
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 it is expected to reach 50% in 2040. In 1970, Thailand accounted for almost 20% of the total population of Asia, starting to
increase
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 throughout the
period
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 to around 30% in 2020, which is predicted to be 45% in 2040.
Indonesia
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,
on the other hand
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, had the lowest rate of population in 1970 at 11%, but it witnessed a sharp
increase
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 in 2000 and 2010, of 26% and 41%, respectively. The percentage of
people
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 in
Indonesia
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 is expected to be more than 60% in 2040.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, malaysia, indonesia, period, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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