Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian, because we do not need to eat meat to stay healthy. To what do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, most
people
believe everyone does
not eat Verb problem
should
meat
products
and should be a vegetarian. That is
why they think that eating meat
is harmful rather than vegetarian foods. Although
eating meat
can cause some health illness
Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
humans
bodies Change the noun form
human
needs
Change the verb form
need
meat
products
that we take protein
from meat
.
Eating a lot of meat
and meat
products
has a negative effect on the human body. Such
as being overweight, much of cholesterol, and heart
Add a missing verb
having heart
diseases
. These problems affect Fix the agreement mistake
disease
people
's lifestyles. In the modern world, many people
consume fast food which consists of meat
. This
meat
is very harmful because it doesn't cook enough. Research in Australia gives a lot of important information about consuming meat
. For example
, eating meat
products
2 or 3 times a day people
would become overweight and heart
disease. So that every Add a missing verb
have heart
people
Fix the agreement mistake
person
eat
good Correct subject-verb agreement
eats
meat
which cooks in different steps by one by.
On the other hand
, meat
products
consist of many vitamins and minerals. For example, protein
, vitamin E, B12 and iron. These vitamins are very important for the human body. People
always try to get energy in order to be active, strong and healthy. That is
why people
eat useful and natural foods which are full of vitamins. If people
eat meat
products
with limits, it would be positive and people
feel themselves energetic . Doctors say people
have less iron which is the reason for slumber, stress, eye problems and being inactive. Moreover
, many sportsman
need a lot of Change to a plural noun
sportsmen
protein
so that
they eat Correct word choice
apply
meat
products
. Protein
in meat
helps people
to be healthy and strong.
In conclusion, humans consume vegetables and meat
products
with limits. And human'
bodies would be strong and healthy.Change noun form
human
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task response
To improve clarity, refine your thesis statement in the introduction to clearly outline your stance and key points. For example, you might state, 'While some argue for a vegetarian lifestyle for health reasons, I believe that a balanced diet including meat is crucial for overall health.'
coherence cohesion
Ensure logical progression between sentences and paragraphs. For example, integrate smoother transitions like, 'Moreover' or 'In addition' to connect ideas more coherently.
task response
Although you provide relevant examples, ensure they directly support your main points with more detail. For instance, discuss specific studies or elaborate on how athletes benefit from protein in meat.
coherence cohesion
Ensure to check for minor grammatical and syntactical errors to enhance readability. For example, 'For example, eating meat products 2 or 3 times a day people would become overweight and heart disease.' could be revised to 'For example, consuming meat products 2 or 3 times a day can lead to overweight and heart disease.'
task response
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, discussing potential health issues associated with meat consumption as well as the benefits of nutrients found in meat.
task response
You include relevant points and examples to explain your position, such as the Australian research on meat consumption and the benefits of vitamins found in meat.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?