In some cities public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In an ever-progressive society, there is a trend towards using public parks and open spaces for local residents to grow
fruit
and vegetables. This
situation contains a lot of impacts that outweigh its benefits to society.
Central to this
situation is the difficulties in separating land and managing the ways people
use it. In other words
, public places are areas controlled by the government and belong to the country, so it is hard to manage them equally and also
causes many social problems or even breaks neighbourhood communication. Besides
, in cities, fruit
and vegetables are expensive goods so can attract thieves and also
a place where people
can throw litter impolitely. For instance
, many cities allow dwellers to plant
fruit
and vegetables but need to close due to
the problems it causes and change to plant
trees or construct new places for exercising. Hence
, using public places for planting is impossible.
However
, there are some people
who believe that this
can encourage people
to consume healthy food. They argue that it is an opportunity for people
to create their own small gardens in the urban areas that have little land but many residents live in. Perhaps, it is credible, but plant
fruit
requires large amounts of fertilizers that cause many problems and are toxic to the environment. Also
, they can create their own spaces for planting by designing houses with large balconies or roots to plant
fruit
in the agricultural tubs like the way citizens in large cities such
as Mumbai, Tokyo and Seoul do.
In conclusion, utilizing public land for planting is hard to manage and toxic to the environment. Therefore
, the impacts of this
situation outweigh its benefits.Submitted by [email protected] on
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Ensure all ideas are fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay can benefit from more concrete instances to support claims, particularly in the arguments against using public land for planting.
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coherence cohesion
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