The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK in the year 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK in the year 2005. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the proportion of British employees in 2005 in various working areas
according to
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gender.
Overall
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, men tended to be involved in managerial jobs like skilled trades, senior officials, and professional occupations
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women were more common in sales and customer
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, administrative and secretarial
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personal
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. Looking at the percentage of males in different works in the period, boys especially tended to work in skilled trades
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manager and senior officials with 20% and about 18% respectively. These figures in 4 other working areas
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as professional, associate professional and technical, plan and machine operatives, and elementary were nearly equal, from about 12% to 14%
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the rates of guys working in the three occupations left were very low, around 5% for both sales and customer
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administrative and secretarial, and only about 2% for personal
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. It can be seen that administrative and secretarial work was the most
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one of female employees, with more than 20%, the highest rate of all these employment.
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, the number of girls who chose to work in skill-trained trades
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machinery-relating works was very little, around 2% for both. Most women tended to choose the six others as their preferred jobs with the proportion fluctuating from about 12 to 15%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words service with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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