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The pie charts below show the result of a survey of children’s activities. The first chart shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second chart shows the activities in which the girls participate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the result of a survey of children’s activities. The first chart shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second chart shows the activities in which the girls participate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The two pie charts compare the survey
result
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results
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 of
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boys
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boys'
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 and
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girls
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girls'
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 participation in various free time and cultural activities. The data is calibrated in percentage.
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,
the
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apply
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most of the
boys
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 are highly inclined towards games
while
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the
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a
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 significant ratio of
girls
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 opted
dancing
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for dancing
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. It is noticeable from the graph,
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that just
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 more than one-third of
boys
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 played computer games
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 2.6% preferred playing Basketball.
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, more than one-tenth of them liked to do Skateboarding and Soccer was preferred by 17% of
boys
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. A very
less
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low
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 proportion of
boys
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 opted to read books, at 2%. Surprisingly, listening to music was an activity which was equally enjoyed by
boys
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 and
girls
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, at 10%. Switching to
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girls
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girls'
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 activities, the most popular interest among
girls
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 was dancing
with
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at
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 27% and reading at 21%, unlike
boys
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. 11% and 15% preferred gymnastics, and netball. Interestingly, playing computer games was not
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as
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 famous among
girls
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 as compared to
boys
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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