The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.
The table chart illustrates data about
rail
transport in four areas during the
2007.
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Overall
, it is clear that
the top-ranked country
was China , whereas
, Canada was the lowest country
where a
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rail
was used, despite the fact that this
country
carried much more cargo than others.
Firstly
, as China is a country
in which rail
was used the most, kilometers
for one person was 1980, in the meantime, in Canada Change the spelling
kilometres
for
per head was 80 kilometres.Change preposition
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Hence
, Canada carried 28,20 billion Change preposition
in trasportation
trasportation
, meanwhile, the Correct your spelling
transportation
UAE
had only 21,9.
Secondly
, 5,5 million of
people used Change preposition
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rail
in the UAE
, whereas
, in Malaysia this
number was 5,9 million, however
in the UAE
kilometres for passenger
was 780, in the meantime, in Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
Malaysia
it was 780. It is obvious that Add a comma
Malaysia,
cargo
which was carried by Malaysia Correct article usage
the cargo
wa
much more Correct your spelling
was
that
in the Correct your spelling
than
UAE
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