The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.
The table chart illustrates data about
rail
transport in four areas during
the
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2007.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the top-ranked
country
was China ,
whereas
, Canada was the lowest
country
where
a
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rail
was used, despite the fact that
this
country
carried much more cargo than others.
Firstly
, as China is a
country
in which
rail
was used the most,
kilometers
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for one person was 1980, in the meantime, in Canada
for
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per head was 80 kilometres.
Hence
, Canada carried 28,20 billion
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trasportation
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transportation
, meanwhile, the
UAE
had only 21,9.
Secondly
, 5,5 million
of
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people used
rail
in the
UAE
,
whereas
, in Malaysia
this
number was 5,9 million,
however
in the
UAE
kilometres for
passenger
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passengers
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was 780, in the meantime, in
Malaysia
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Malaysia,
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it was 780. It is obvious that
cargo
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the cargo
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which was carried by Malaysia
wa
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was
much more
that
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than
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in the
UAE
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rail, country, uae with synonyms.
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