The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The statistics compare online sales for retail sectors in Canada between 2005 and 2010, a period of 5 years. The popularity of video games,
as well as
food and beverage, increased
whereas
shopping sales of home furnishings and
electronics
and
appliance
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declined. As is shown by the pie charts, in 2005 the highest demand was for
electronics
and
appliance
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appliances
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,
however
, the percentage decreased by 5% over 5 years and,
therefore
, the proportion of food and
beverage
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beverages
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outweighed the figure
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of
electronics
and
appliance
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appliances
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. The scale of digital sales of home furnishings reduced by twice as much as that of
electronics
and
appliance
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appliances
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.
In contrast
, the online purchases of video games dropped over the timescale of five years to finish at only 23%. As is illustrated by the graph,
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% collapse in the proportion of turnover of home furnishings was radical as in 2010 the number appeared to be the least.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electronics, appliance with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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