The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The statistics compare online sales for retail sectors in Canada between 2005 and 2010, a period of 5 years. The popularity of video games,
as well as
food and beverage, increased whereas
shopping sales of home furnishings and electronics
and appliance
declined.
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electronics
and appliance
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however
, the percentage decreased by 5% over 5 years and, therefore
, the proportion of food and beverage
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electronics
and appliance
. The scale of digital sales of home furnishings reduced by twice as much as that of Fix the agreement mistake
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appliances
In contrast
, the online purchases of video games dropped over the timescale of five years to finish at only 23%. As is illustrated by the graph, 10
% collapse in the proportion of turnover of home furnishings was radical as in 2010 the number appeared to be the least.Correct article usage
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