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The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types.

The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types.
The diagram illustrates how
tea
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 manufacturing process of five different
sort
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sorts
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 of
tea
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all
tea
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 types are produced from the same essence, but they
are became
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become
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 different types of
tea
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in
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as
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the
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a
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 result. First of all, the first three
stage
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stages
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 of
producing
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production
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 are the same for all types of
tea
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. The
leaveas
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leaves
 are grown,
then
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 they are plucked,
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following
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and following
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this
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this,
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 they are withered. The final stages
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also
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are also
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 the same, which
they
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apply
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are dried
by
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in
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oven
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the oven
an oven
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.
Furthermore
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, in the stages
in
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apply
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among these, using different techniques for
produce
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production
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.
To begin
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 with white
tea
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,
it corcern
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contains
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 no other stages. Contrastly, green, oolong and
large
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large-leaf
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leaf
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 black
tea
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 are rolled.
Nevertheless
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,
while
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 green
tea
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 is rolled steamed before rolled but
it
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apply
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is not fermented, oolong and large
leaf
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 black
tea
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is
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are
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 not
stemaed
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steamed
stemmed
 but after
rolled
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being rolled
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 they are fermented.
Additionally
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,
while
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 oolong
tea
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are
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is
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 slightly fermented,
large
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large-leaf
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leaf
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 black
tea
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fully
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is fully
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 fermented. Ultimately,
small
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small-leaf
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leaf
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 black
tea
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 is not steamed or rolled but is crushed before
compeletly
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completely
 fermented.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, leaf with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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