You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organizers. In your letter: -explain why you are interested in helping -Give details suitable past experience -suggest ways you might help with the event.

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Dear authorised, My name is Ozan Gungor and

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I'm

living in Istanbul. I saw your advert in the newspaper. It interested me. Because I lived two years in Africa to find water. I'm a machine engineer and I have my own company. That's why I have more free time. I'm a volunteer for your new program. I can pay for my flight ticket and I have

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for Niger. By the way, I have experience of digging machines. My company has a many AR-GE project for powerful digging machines. If I come to Niger, I will solve too many problems. And

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I have a medicine and

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certificate. In my free

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I can teach how to play guitar for kids. I was teaching kids before that's very funny. I will be happy if you would accept me. Because I want to help them. I don't know why but I feel they need my experience. Best regards, Ozan Gungor

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suitable writing tone

Your letter could benefit from a more formal and consistent tone throughout. This will help convey professionalism.

single idea per paragraph

Consider organizing your paragraphs more effectively. Group related ideas together to enhance clarity.

complete response

Great explanation of your interest in helping with specific and relevant past experiences.

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Your personal experiences and qualifications are well detailed, showing your commitment and enthusiasm for volunteering.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

160 words

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