Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. a) apologize for damaging the product b) explain what happened c) say how are you going to fix the issue

Dear jay, I hope you are doing well, I am writing
this
letter with regard to express my sincere apology because, I broke the
glass
of your laptop,which I borrowed from you
last
week. Let me explain my situation in more detail, I took your laptop,because I needed
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for making
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a presentation
of
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my college project.
Last
night, when I was preparing the presentation that time suddenly I got a call from my cousin so, my attention was diverted and
menwhile
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while
my pet dog started playing with it and he broke the
glass
. I was angry
on
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my pet dog,but I couldn't able to do anything,because it was my fault.
Moreover
, I already planned to replace the
broke
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glass
with
new
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one but,before
that
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I need your consent.
Therefore
I am writing you
this
letter to express my apology and ask you to give me
a
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permission to replace new
glass
for your device. I hope you understand my situation and forgive me. Yours sincerely Parth
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Try to use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your writing tone and make it more engaging.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are effectively used, maintaining a friendly tone throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has a single main idea, corresponding accurately to the task prompts.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apology
  • Regretful
  • Incident
  • Circumstances
  • Damaged
  • Compensation
  • Repair
  • Replace
  • Responsibility
  • Understanding
  • Forgiveness
  • Sincerely
  • Resolve
  • Personal belongings
  • Accidental
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