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he charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in one country between 1920 and 2019.

he charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The graphs illustrate the
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 in electrical devices and the amount of time
spending
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 on housework in 1 nation in the period 1920-2019.
Overall
, the percentage of households
in
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 Washing
machine
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machines
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, Refrigerator,
Vacuum
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and Vacuum
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cleaner
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 increased
while
 the number of
hours
 spent on those devices saw a decrease. It can be seen that
,
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 the percentage of Washing
machine
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machines
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 from 1920 to 1960 increased from 40% to 70%.
However
, 20
years
after
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,
this
 figure saw a decline to about 65%.
Additionally
, from 1980 to 2019,
this
propotion
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proportion
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 went up slightly to 72%. Moving to the Regrigerator's portion, it was
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1% to 100% in
first
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 60
years
. After 39
years
, It saw a remain
percent
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 and was the highest rate in
last
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the last
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 59
years
.
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Furthermore
, the ratio of Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 rose from 30% to 100% in the same 1920-2000,
then
 it saw
a
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stability in
last
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the last
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 19
years
. Turning to the number of
hours
 chart, there was a significant plunge from 50
hours
 to 30
hours
 per week in 1920 to 1960.
Then
, it went down moderately from 20 to 15
hours
 in 1980.
Besides
, the number of
hours
 was a steadiness in 2000.
On the other hand
, in
last
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 19
years
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this
 figure
fall
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 down faintly from 15% to 10%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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