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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in the bar chart is data pertaining to the quality of
visitors
 in 3 specific New York airports from 1995 to 2000. The
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 are measured in millions.
Overall
, it can be observed that the La
Guardia
airport
 increased in the number of
visitors
through out
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 the period
while
 the other two airports
flutuated
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upward in their
figures
.
Additionally
, it should
also
 be noted that La
Guardia
airport
was
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recorded the highest number of
visitors
 during the timeframe with one exception in the year 1997. Examining the
figures
 more closely,
it is clear that
 La
Guardia
airport
 started with nearly 35
million
visitors
 in 1995.
Then
 the
figures
 witnessed a general growth through to 1999 when it had 50
million
visitors
 before reaching
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the top in 2000 with approximately 70% and still recording as the
airport
 with the most
visitors
. With regards to the remaining data, it can be seen that John F. Kennedy had about 26
million
 travellers in 1995
then
 went up to around 48
million
 when it replaced La
Guardia
airport
, becoming the most visited
airport
 in 1997 but its
figures
 dipped to just over 30
million
 in 1998 and 1999 before going up again in 2000 with roughly 44
million
visitors
.
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