The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 amd 2006.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 amd 2006.
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The bar chart compares the four types of digital
games
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in terms of
overall
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sales
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in
billions
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of
dollars
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in the world from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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, the most
sales
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were experienced in
sales
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of the handheld
games
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.
While
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the
sales
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of handheld, online and mobile phone
games
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increased gradually, the
sales
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of
the
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apply
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console
games
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decreased slowly. In 2000, about 11
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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sales
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in sales
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were experienced in handheld
games
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. Its
sales
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increased quickly to approximately 15
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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in 2002 and levelled off until 2005.
Then
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, it grew sharply to nearly 18
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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in 2006. Regarding online
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games
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game
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sales
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, its
sales
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began at about 1
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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in 2001. It rose slowly to approximately 4
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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in 2004 and continued its growth to reach the highest peak at 10
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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in 2006. Turning to
indicator
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the indicator
an indicator
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of mobile phone
sales
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, it began with 2
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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sales
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in sales
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in 2002.
Then
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, it had
steady
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a steady
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increase to about 7
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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by 2006. Regarding
figure
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the figure
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for
sales
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of
the
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console
games
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, its decline started at 6
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billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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in 2000 and continued to hit the lowest point at approximately 3
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billions
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billion
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dollars
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words games, sales, billions, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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