The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 amd 2006.
The bar chart compares the four types of digital
games
in terms of overall
sales
in billions
of dollars
in the world from 2000 to 2006.
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, the most sales
were experienced in sales
of the handheld games
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decreased slowly.
In 2000, about 11 billions
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. Its sales
increased quickly to approximately 15 billions
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in 2002 and levelled off until 2005. Then
, it grew sharply to nearly 18 billions
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in 2006. Regarding online games
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, its sales
began at about 1 billions
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in 2001. It rose slowly to approximately 4 billions
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in 2004 and continued its growth to reach the highest peak at 10 billions
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, it began with 2 billions
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by 2006.
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, its decline started at 6 billions
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in 2000 and continued to hit the lowest point at approximately 3 billions
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