Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
It is a belief among some
people
that funding motorways and roads is more pivotal than investing in public transport
infrastructure. This
writer contends that investing in public transport
plays a more imminent role, since it helps people
to travel
faster, despite opposing views stating commuters can travel
freely every time
.
It must be acknowledged that public transport
infrastructure provides people
with high-speed travelling, rather than roads or motorways. This
is because public transport
routes
have less
traffic lights and the speed limit is much larger than that of motorways and roads. Change the quantifier
fewer
Combining
with the Wrong verb form
Combined
high power
engines of trains and trams, these Add a hyphen
high-power
routes
can help people
travel
between distances faster than the other mentioned to
Change preposition
apply
routes
of transport
. For instance
, trains can travel
commuters between two distant cities faster due to
its
velocity.
Correct pronoun usage
their
However
, a minority of individuals believe that the subsidy should be for non-railway on land ways because people
can have a
Remove the article
time-effective travel
a time-effective journey
a time-effective trip
time
-effective travel
. Due to
being limited by merely no regulations of time
, Add an article
the time
travelers
can make use of Change the spelling
travellers
this
to commute conveniently regardless of time
. Although
this
point is valid, it is also
the thing that prohibits people
from doing it. With too many people
on the road, traffic congestions
will occur, causing Fix the agreement mistake
congestion
time
loss, whereas
under
strict timings, systems of public Add the comma(s)
, under
transport
can travel
on time
. Take trams as an example, the reason why they are always on time
compared to cabs is because railway routes
had no traffic under the schedules of tram stations.
In conclusion, the author agrees that the fund should be poured into public transport
infrastructure, due to
large
speed and Correct article usage
the large
time
-efficient commuting.Submitted by [email protected]
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task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and presents a clear position that supports investing in public transport over roads and motorways. However, it would benefit from more nuanced arguments and further exploration of counterpoints.
task achievement
The ideas are generally clear, but there are areas where the language could be more precise and nuanced. For instance, 'imminent role' could be more accurately phrased as 'important role.' Additionally, some sentences are a bit convoluted and could be simplified for clarity.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs and ideas could be smoother. For example, phrases like 'It must be acknowledged that' and 'Take trams as an example' can be replaced with more natural transitions.
coherence cohesion
The main points are supported but would benefit from more detailed evidence and examples. For instance, when discussing the speed of trains, providing specific statistics or studies could strengthen the argument.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and reasonably well-constructed, clearly stating the position and summarizing the main arguments.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and provides relevant arguments and examples, such as the comparison between trains and other modes of transport.
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