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The bar chart shows the average number of hours students in ive different universities studied.

The bar chart shows the average number of hours students in ive different universities studied.
#bar #hours #students #ive #universities
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Contained in the two
barcharts
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bar charts
 are data relating to
studying
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the studying
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hours
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 of
students
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 in five distinctive
univerities
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universities
which
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apply
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at
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on
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weekdays
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 and at
weekends
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.
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, it can be clearly seen that the number of
hours
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at
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weekdays
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 remained slightly unchanged,
whereas
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 there was a decline at
weekends
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. It can be
also
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 observed that
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University
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university
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 C
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at
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on
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weekdays
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 and
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University
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university
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 A at
weekends
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 have the topmost proportion of
hours
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 that
students
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 studied,
while
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University
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university
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 D's
hours
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were
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was
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were
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 the smallest in
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the two
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two
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the two
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 charts. Beginning with
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weekdays
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weekday
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 rates, it is evident that they were far higher than
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weekends
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weekend
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 rates. With 10.6,
hours
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 of studying in
university
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 C is the highest
of
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on
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 the chart.
This
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 is
in contrast
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 with
university
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 D where
students
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 spent at least
hours
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 of studying, with 9.6.
This
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 is followed by
unversity
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university
 B,
university
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 E and
university
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 A with
espective
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respective
 figures being 10.1, 10 and 9.8. Turning to
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weekends
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weekend
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 rates, it can be observed that
students
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 spent the most in
university
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 A, at 9. The noticeable point is
that
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a fluctuation in
university
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 D, it dropped down to 5.6 which was the lowest of the charts.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, students, weekdays, weekends, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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