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Band 5

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport system. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether
further
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 investment should be poured
in
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into
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 motorways and roads or in systems of public
transport
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 including trams and railways is a highly subjective debate.
This
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 author agrees with
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 statement
due to
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 aesthetic taste and privacy. The booming styles and features of cars and private
transport
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in general
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, in general,
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 should be mentioned as the key reason why we should invest in
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 field’s infrastructure. As more inventions and groundbreaking discoveries are appearing,
transport
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 brands are allowed to create and invent more genres and appearances that suit personal
taste
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tastes
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. The development of Toyota with various types with a wide range of features could be a prime example
for
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of
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this
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 point.
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, more people will be attracted to private
transport
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 leading to an increase in
number
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a number
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 of these on roads in the near future,
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, there will be an increasing need for
netter
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better
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 traffic infrastructure. Another point
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 worth mentioning is the
imprivacy
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privacy
 of public
transport
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. Even with the latest technology and features or with the top service, thefts and sexual abuses would still occur as people will still travel with unfamiliar individuals leading to discomfort and fear among residents which discourage them from using
transports
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 for the public. An increasing number of thefts on buses and trams should be mentioned as a perfect reference for
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 statement. For that reason, unless there are possible methods or improvements to address these problems, cars and motorcycles would still be the residents’ preferences over trams and trains.
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, with the benefits of satisfying aesthetic desire and securing privacy, private
transport
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 systems are generally preferable to public ones.
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, more money should be spent on these systems to ensure the highest quality of satisfaction when travelling.

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introduction
Your essay could benefit from a stronger introduction and conclusion. Try to clearly outline your main points in the introduction and summarize them in the conclusion.
supporting details
Your main points are clear but could use more specific examples and elaboration. Providing concrete examples and elaborating on them can strengthen your arguments.
transition
Ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs to improve the overall flow of your essay. Linking ideas more cohesively will make your argument more compelling.
position
Your essay presents a clear position and maintains it throughout. This consistency is crucial for a high task response score.
complete response
You have addressed the question effectively, discussing both the importance of private transport infrastructure and the drawbacks of public transport.
main points
The points made about aesthetic tastes and privacy are relevant and thoughtfully considered. They are indicative of a clear and critical thinking process.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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