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The graph below shows the wheat export of three different areas from 1985 to 1990

The graph below shows the wheat export of three different areas from 1985 to 1990
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The line graph compares three regions in terms of
exports
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 of wheat between 1985 and 1990.
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, the three
region
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regions
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 experienced different trends.
While
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 the
exports
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 in Canada and European countries experienced some fluctuations, the
exports
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 in Australia fell over time. As the graph shows, the
exports
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 in Australia started at 15
million
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tons
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 in 1985 followed by a small increase to 16
million
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 in 1986.
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, it declined steadily to just over 10
million
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tons
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in
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at
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 the end of 1990. Afterwards, Canada's
export
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exports
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 shipped at 19
million
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tons
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 in 1985 and experienced a small
declined
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 to approximately 17
million
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tons
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.
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, it rose significantly to 25
million
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tons
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 in 1988 and
suddently
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suddenly
 dropped to just under 15
million
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tons
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 in 1989.
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, it hiked gradually to just under 20
million
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tons
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 in 1990.
By contrast
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, in 1985, the
exports
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 of wheat in
European
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the European
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 community started at 17
million
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tons
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 and
followed
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were followed
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 by a small
deminish
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decline
 to just under 15
million
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tons
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.
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, it grew slightly to 15
million
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tons
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 in 1987 and 1988. After that, it experienced steady growth to 18
million
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 and 21
million
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tons
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 in 1989 and 1990, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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