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Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news event.Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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use
 social platforms in daily life for different purposes
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 impact on their life.The following essay will take a look at different
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perspectives
 on the topic of using social networking,considering both
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 positive and negative. On the one hand,it is obvious
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that
 using
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social
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media
 brings us a
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number
 of advantages.The first and foremost benefit is that social media plays a major role in communication.
For example
,the young generation
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use
 of Facebook or Google
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 platforms to keep in touch with their friends or their family.
Additionally
,the
use
 of social networks
also
 brings a chance to
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entertain
 themselves. On the one hand,when it comes to the drawbacks of
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 social media.If people
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dependent on one may lead to
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 and productivity will be reduced.For
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instance
,they may
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 negative impacts on physical and
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mental
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 health.
Furthermore
,the
use
 of social platforms may risk privacy and cyber crimes,so it can cause violent valuable personal information. In conclusion,
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 social media have benefits
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the drawbacks
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outweigh.In my opinion,the existence of potentially harmful content.
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Introduce a clear thesis statement in the introduction to outline your argument more effectively.
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coherence cohesion
Conclude your essay with a summary that clearly reflects the points discussed, rather than introducing new ideas.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You have addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of using social media, which adds balance to the essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • widespread use
  • revolutionized communication
  • geographical barriers
  • primary source
  • instant access
  • misinformation
  • news bias
  • mental health
  • increased feelings
  • more 'connected'
  • mobilizing public opinion
  • social movements
  • societal issues
  • collective action
  • evolution of social media
  • sophisticated ecosystems
  • e-commerce
  • entertainment
  • educational content
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