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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevent.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevent.
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The bar graph illustrates details about the weekly budget for families in one region in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is obvious that food
spending's
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spendings
spending
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 was the highest in 1968. Meanwhile, the money spent
for
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on
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 leisure activities in 2018 had increased. In 2018, money spent on food had a dramatic downward trend in comparison to
to
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year
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the year
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 of 1968. In 1968 it reached 35%,
While
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 in 2018 it was roughly 18%.
Second
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The second
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 top payments in 2018 were
Housing
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for Housing
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, transport and leisure activities ranging between over 10% to 23%. Other than food in 1968, people did not
not
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spend money on vehicles fuel, shopping or groceries. It all fluctuated from 5% to 10%.

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