Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people claim that
governaments
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governments
should invest
money
to create advantages for the nation,
instead
wasting
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of wasting
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money
on
space
exploration
projects. I agree with
this
school of thought, but I think that every country has different
money
funds. In
this
essay, I will explain these points. Every country
of
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this
planet lives with a different economic capacity,
thus
it is hard to stabilise who
are
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is
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wasting
money
on
space
exploration
or who
are
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not. There are nations that are able to
ivest
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invest
more
money
than others.
For
example
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the United States can afford
space
exploration
projects
by
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their own. USA had built the biggest aerospatial company
of
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our
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world called NASA. In some
way
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way,
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they are the veterans and enough skilled to not
considered
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any thought about wasted
money
.
On the other hand
, there are several other countries without the same economic status. In these cases, when nations are not able to afford
these kind
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of projects it is better that their governments start to use
money
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the money
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to face
on
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other things,
such
as national problems.
For instance
, the Italian government spent
money
in
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three
space
expeditions in the
last
decade
while
the nation had, and still
have
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, many problems in
south
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of Italy. Many citizens are not able to go to the hospital because they are so far and
for
this
reason
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reason,
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government should invest
money
building
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in building
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new hospital structures. In conclusion,
money
is never wasted if is spent wisely. Many countries have to face different national issues,
while
other
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are free
on spending
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to spend
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money
for
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on
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space
exploration
. Every decision has to
be make
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in base
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of
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the capacity of a single nation.
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grammar vocabulary
Ensure proper grammar and vocabulary usage to improve clarity. For example, 'governaments' should be corrected to 'governments' and 'ivest' should be 'invest.' Additionally, 'aerospatial' should be replaced with 'aerospace.'
cohesion
Link ideas more explicitly. For instance, using transitions like 'Moreover' or 'Furthermore' can support the flow of your arguments.
coherence
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea and expands on it. For instance, the paragraph about economic disparity could be expanded to give more concrete examples from other countries as well.
introduction
The introduction is clear and sets the stage for the argument.
content
Each paragraph has a clear main idea which supports the overall argument.
conclusion
Conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces the argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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