Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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history,

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portion of

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budget has

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in

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sector all over the world.

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, the allocation of budgets

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arts

or public services is a matter of debate. Some experts mention that there is

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to invest more in the cultural sites in cities,

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others believe it is wasting money and anticipate public facilities are more crucial

instead

of music or theatre. I am actually in favour of the prior argument for two main reasons. As a matter of fact, the

arts

generally enhance human beings’ mental health and communities’ cultural enrichment thoroughly.

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,

scientist

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depict that listening to a particular music genre

such

as classical ones, would boost

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concentration and mounting the focusing

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in a studying process.

Furthermore

, when spectators

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a comedy theatre, it will reduce mental issues

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and

anxieties

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.

Secondly

, investing in the

arts

would flourish

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local economy

consequently

.

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, Paris municipality and other related departments have held annual gallery or music exhibitions to

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masterpiece artworks.

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reason, many tourists around the

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have mounted to visit these shows,

also

by expending huge amounts of money. Particularly Paris retailers and local shops could benefit from these revenues.

On the other hand

, the massive cost of holding an exhibition or constructing a cinema is an issue, which some experts mention. For

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the costs of

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cultural events

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devastating,

however

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usage

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of a surplus budget in

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sustainable states should be recommended.

To conclude

, the cost of the

arts

is not

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,

although

it is

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actually to flourish culture and economy of a city. In my opinion, governments should invest a surplus budget into the

arts

, which provide opportunities to make profits for all walks of people.