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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map above
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the direction of the main
pplanner
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plane
 of
brandfield
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Bradfield
brand field
, The
establish
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establishment
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 of
new
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a new
the new
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 shopping mall for the city, and two parts, S1 and S2 have been suggested.
Overall
 the map shows a clear direction and vision of the new buildings. As
it's divide
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 into
to
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two
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 main areas, S1 which is located next to the Golf course and beside the housing estate, As it
show
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also
 it's Cross by the river road.
While
 S2 is smaller than S1
but
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apply
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it
located
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 near to it and surrounded by the railway and road. In conclusion,
implantation
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the implantation
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 of
this
 new building will add more value for the region as it will
facilitie
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facilitate
 shopping and the variety of the
location
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locations
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play
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plays
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 a successful key. They ease of access to both of the
area
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areas
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 S1 and S2 as it a lot of railways.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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