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The given three picture compare the town’s development during 1900,1950 and 2000.

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The given three
picture
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pictures
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 compare the town’s development during 1900,1950 and 2000.
Overall
, we can discuss that Tarnagul is the town where fruits grow,
also
 between two areas
locate
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 a river. As the first diagram suggests
in
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on
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 the north
side
 of
map
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the map
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 constructed area of oranges,
therefore
 on the western
side
 and on the left
side
 built Dairy.
Moreover
, Mandarin’s place
located
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 under the road. The Town area is between the road and
in
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on
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 the right
side
 of
river
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the river
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. Actually, we have to describe the next map about 1950 years.
This
 second map
demonstrate
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 that two Orange areas
built
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are built
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 perpendicular to each other.
Furthermore
, in the
north west
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gives
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area
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the area
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 of Lemons and Grape-fruits. Along the
roadside
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roadside,
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 we can
remark
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see
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 two Packing sheds.
Subsequently
,
nearby
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near
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this
 road and packing sheds we can see
Railway
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the Railway
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 station.
Consequently
, the third picture illustrates
Wildlife
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a Wildlife
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 Sanctuary and some unused areas.
Likewise
,
Local
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the Local
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 Museum is perpendicular to
Craft
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the Craft
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 Market.
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introduction conclusion present
Try to provide a more detailed introduction and a clear conclusion to summarize the main points of your analysis.
complete response
Make sure to describe each development phase clearly and in more detail to provide comprehensive coverage of the changes over time.
logical structure
Enhance clarity by ensuring your points are well-organized and logically connected. Consider using paragraphs for each time period or key aspect of the development.
complete response
The essay addresses the task and includes some relevant details about the development of the town over time.
supported main points
Key areas and elements are mentioned, showing a general understanding of the changes in the town’s layout and features.

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