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The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
map
Use synonyms
 illustrates the changes in the neighbourhood when they dug a mall into it.
Overall
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, as the
map
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 shows the renovation plans
includes
Correct subject-verb agreement
include
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 adding a shopping centre to the neighbourhood
along with
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 making a bit of changes around the houses.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, as
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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seen in the first
map
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 the neighborhood was
sorrounded
Correct your spelling
surrounded
 by houses on both Main
street
Capitalize word
Street
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 and Oak
street
Capitalize word
Street
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.
In addition
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 to that, there was a park, a lake in the middle of the park with
footwear
Correct article usage
a footwear
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 shop and a bookshop store. In comparison to the first
map
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 we can see that there were a lot of changes in the second
map
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, they built a mall and took away both the woods and the park. They added two parking lots, a large one below the shopping centre and between the streets.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic flow
  • Land use
  • Residential buildings
  • Commercial activities
  • Local businesses
  • Retail stores
  • Local economy
  • Employment
  • Community facilities
  • Displaced
  • Construction
  • Green spaces
  • Pollution
  • Noise
  • Environmental impact
  • Neighborhood dynamics
  • Transformation
  • Redevelopment
  • Infrastructure
  • Urbanization
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