The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.

The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.
This
bar chart displays the sum of calls by telephone from 1995 to 2002. The usage in three different groups, the fixed
line
in local, national and global, and mobile calls. It is clear from the graph that the local fixed
line
is the most consuming one during the period.
According to
what is shown, the fixed
line
which is the local one, was increasing by millions from 70 to 90. From 1996 to 1999, as is despite in the figure, it was steady.
However
, the following year, it decreased to 85, and it remained declining until 2002.
While
the national and international fixed boundary was
rasing
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raising
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in a regular pattern over the 7 years. The
last
group which is the cell phone , started to increase by a
little
Correct word choice
small
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percentage and
was
Verb problem
apply
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dramatically
rising
Wrong verb form
rose
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in the
last
three years 2000 to 2002.
To sum up
we could say,
the
Correct word choice
that the
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national and global fixed
line
and mobile calls have increased all the years.
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