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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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The given bar chart illustrates the number of illiteracy by gender and region
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 the end of
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, it can be seen that the percentage of
females
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 is higher than
males
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 in all regions of the world.
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, both genders in Latin American/Caribean and Developed countries nearly saw equal proportions of illiteracy. Looking at a group of regions which witnessed the higher rates of people who can not read or write a language, in South Asia, there are around 55%
females
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 and nearly 35%
males
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, more than 50% of women,
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 30% of men in Arab States lack
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 ability.
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, Sub-Saharan Africa experiences about 48%
females
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 and over 30% Moving onto a lower group, East Asia/Oceania is similar to Developed countries with the proportion of
females
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 close to
males
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. With the lowest percentage of illiteracy, Developed countries have only 1%
males
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 and 2%
females
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,
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 Latin American/ Caribean saw 10% of women and about 12% of men.
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, there is 20% of
males
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 higher than roughly 8% of
females
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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