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The pie charts give information about 4 different products (Cotton,Wheat,Vegetable,Fruit)which exported in Uzbekistan between 2012 and 2018.

The pie charts give information about 4 different products (Cotton,Wheat,Vegetable,Fruit)which exported in Uzbekistan between 2012 and 2018.
The provided pie chart demonstrates data about how many four various
products
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 were exported in
Uzbekistan
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 over a
six_year
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six-year
 period. It can be clearly seen that other
products
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has
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 the highest amount of exportation in
Uzbekistan
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 and Wheat comes next.
However
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,industrial companies could not export cotton in
Uzbekistan
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 over the period. Nearly half of the figure consisted of other
products
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 (%32) and Wheat (%15) in
Uzbekistan
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 from 2012 to 2018.
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,the
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proportion
proporation
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proportion
 of Rice exported from
Uzbekistan
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 was the same as Corn with %13 and %10,respectively,just ahead of forage
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plants
palnts
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plants
 with %9
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,just over a quarter of
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 comprised
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several different
products
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 like Sugar cane,Cotton and Barely in
Uzbekistan
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 in the years(2012 and 2018).
Similarly
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,Coir,Millet and Oil palm were exported with exactly %2 in
Uzbekistan
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 over the period.(Which was the lowest amount of exportation in the years).

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, uzbekistan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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