The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pie graphs compare four different online sales items in the years 2005 and 2010 in Canada.

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, at the beginning of the period, people tended to buy more electronics and appliance items online

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to video games, which had the smallest segment of the chart.

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, food and drinks made up the biggest part of the chart

at the end

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of the period. In 2005, the number of people who bought electronics and other devices online was the highest at 35%, followed by home furniture with the number of quarters. In the same year, customers who preferred to buy food and beverages online was 22%.

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, the lowest rate of online sales was for video games at 18%. By 2010, more people buy food online with a percentage of 32.

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, the most second online shopping items were for electronics at 30%. Video games had risen by 5%, in 2010,

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home furniture dropped to 15% in the same year.

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